In a quandry

[valarltd]

OK,
so EC got back to me about Burning for Eight Days. (it's flocked, ping me if you're not friended)

1) the lez has to go. No f/f.
2) Needs more plot.

So, here is the question:
Do I revise...yet again, or do I just say "no thanks" and send it to Phaze for the Frost heatsheet?

I already submitted an earlier draft as a Frost when I hadn't head from EC.

The biggest problem with Phaze is the barJonas twins from Burning are the same as the benEzra twins that I submitted for the Frontier heat-sheet.

Comments

Your call, hon.

[dakiwiboid.livejournal.com]

I liked it as it was, but if you think it won't sell elsewhere, revise it for them.

Re: Your call, hon.

[valarltd.livejournal.com]

Been thinking hard while I've been on the road. Definitely a revision. But I have no idea what to do for a plot.

Maybe postpone the deal with Daddy until Valentine's and get a failed romance with the real Sean and have her tempted to retreat to her box instead...

But that doesn't feel like plot, it feels like a scene, and I'm not sure imploding romances sell.