In a quandry

[valarltd]

OK,
so EC got back to me about Burning for Eight Days. (it's flocked, ping me if you're not friended)

1) the lez has to go. No f/f.
2) Needs more plot.

So, here is the question:
Do I revise...yet again, or do I just say "no thanks" and send it to Phaze for the Frost heatsheet?

I already submitted an earlier draft as a Frost when I hadn't head from EC.

The biggest problem with Phaze is the barJonas twins from Burning are the same as the benEzra twins that I submitted for the Frontier heat-sheet.

Comments

[creatorschilde.livejournal.com]

Persoanlly, I like Janice being in there, I think it shows a side of Hannahs personality that is standerd, and it adds a kick to the sotry that makes it a bit different.

THat being said, it wouldnt be the end of the world to change it to a menage, or even replace her with a man.

This final call is totally up to you. Revise or resubmit as you wish, I dont really have a preferance.

[valarltd.livejournal.com]

Thinking of keeping Janis, and turning it into a talk and drink session, letting Adina keep her rock-fixation but saving the sex for a while down the road.

I think it adds to the build-up: visiting and getting turned on by Janis, then voyuering Cupid and then taking the plunge for actual sex.

[creatorschilde.livejournal.com]

that works quite nicely. Id definitely go for that.