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OK, folks, I need your input. Is the second paragraph obnoxious? Warning, sexual violence under the cut.

Phillip listened to the sobbing from outside the door, feeling very ashamed of himself. He tried telling himself he had not been about to force the princess herself, but his stiff cock gave lie to that. He had been. He would have raped her there, as if she were a traitor to the kingdom and crown, as if she were a peasant girl caught in a raid. And he would have enjoyed it.

That shamed him, but only his cheeks burned with it. His loins burned with a different sensation and Eve's Tempter insisted on being slaked. He'd find a willing serving girl. John would kill him for forcing himself on Marion, he knew.