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Day off? Really
Feb. 20th, 2012 11:38 amIt's almost noon.
I have been grocery shopping and done three loads of laundry (sue me, I slept until 8:30)
I'm back to editing Hard Reboot, starting from the first, and seeing what more can be whittled out to clean up the story.
A few notes from Editing Hell
1) If everything is happening suddenly, nothing is sudden. We're just moving at a faster pace.
2) "Just" is almost never needed as a modifier. Use it too often and you sound like someone trying to improvise a prayer and using it as a placeholder word.
3) There is no such thing as "a last, penultimate act." I hurt my head beating it against the wall over that. Go look up penultimate before using it again. Or, go watch the Monty Python sketch The Penultimate Supper which is where *I* learned the definition.
4) No interrobangs. Hermes, Seshat,Thoth and Nabu, are we 12?
5) Ellipses have their place. It is not EVERY place.
6) Exclamation points are shy and solitary creatures. They do not travel in herds. Nor are they often seen.
7) If you need a semi-colon, you've got two sentences. We're not writing Victorian fiction or a dissertation here.
Back to the salt mines of the dark future. Also working on the "sex content by word count" statistic. (For those who wonder, Alive on the inside is 17% sex)
I have been grocery shopping and done three loads of laundry (sue me, I slept until 8:30)
I'm back to editing Hard Reboot, starting from the first, and seeing what more can be whittled out to clean up the story.
A few notes from Editing Hell
1) If everything is happening suddenly, nothing is sudden. We're just moving at a faster pace.
2) "Just" is almost never needed as a modifier. Use it too often and you sound like someone trying to improvise a prayer and using it as a placeholder word.
3) There is no such thing as "a last, penultimate act." I hurt my head beating it against the wall over that. Go look up penultimate before using it again. Or, go watch the Monty Python sketch The Penultimate Supper which is where *I* learned the definition.
4) No interrobangs. Hermes, Seshat,Thoth and Nabu, are we 12?
5) Ellipses have their place. It is not EVERY place.
6) Exclamation points are shy and solitary creatures. They do not travel in herds. Nor are they often seen.
7) If you need a semi-colon, you've got two sentences. We're not writing Victorian fiction or a dissertation here.
Back to the salt mines of the dark future. Also working on the "sex content by word count" statistic. (For those who wonder, Alive on the inside is 17% sex)
